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The ancient stones of the castle whispered secrets of a time long forgotten. Lucian Valdezia walked through the vast halls, his footsteps echoing in the cold, empty corridors. The world outside was different now—a sprawling modern city where glass towers pierced the sky, and electric lights drowned out the stars. Yet here, in the heart of his old fortress, time seemed to stand still.
Lucian's gaze lingered on a faded tapestry depicting an empire once ruled by a god. That god was himself—once. Now, he was but a shadow of his former self, reborn into a world that no longer bowed before his name.
His fingers brushed against the cold iron of a ring—a relic from a past life. The memories stirred within him like ghosts: the laughter of a woman, a warm embrace, the unbearable pain of loss. Aurora. His beloved wife, taken by treachery, her death a wound that time could never heal.
But death was not the end. Lucian had been granted a second chance—a new life where the past could be rewritten.
The academy lay just beyond the castle grounds, a place of learning and power. It was there he had first seen them—two young women whose souls stirred something deep within him. Lilith and Lillian Volgare. Their faces were unfamiliar, but their spirits echoed Aurora's in ways he could not explain.
They were his past and future entwined, a mystery and a hope.
Tonight, as moonlight spilled through stained glass windows, Lucian prepared to meet them once again. The weight of his destiny pressed on his broad shoulders, but this time, he vowed, he would not falter.
He would protect them. He would guide them. He would rewrite fate itself.
The castle doors creaked open, and Lucian stepped into the night, the cold wind carrying whispers of the empire he once ruled—and the new empire he was determined to build.